Ayn Rand Day or Sensitivity to Muslims Day
Posted by richrobinson 12 years, 6 months ago to The Gulch: General
On a recent post Kh made me think of something. If a school had Ayn Rand Day or Sensitivity to Muslims Day which would cause a greater uproar with parents and the community and why.
I am familiar with proper grammar, and all that crap, but I'm talking on a forum so sometimes I just go. Lately I have lacked the time to proof read like I usually do. I'm also inclined to type different words than I intend to, not sure why. I don't care if "etc" is incorrect... I'm not trying to win a writing award.
Your last and final critique was spot on... it could've been your first and only critique, actually.
Did you get the cards, you pain in the ass?
"Boy, that paints a grim and pathetic picture of the murals of those that...."
Okay, I concede... my mind is weird.
I read Anthem first in the 11th grade. By the 12th grade I found a dozen or so "Rand fans" at my high school. However, my English teacher refused to accept "The Fountainhead" for a book report and I read "Arrowsmith" instead.
I attended the Basic Principles of Objectivism lectures my senior year of high school, 1966-1967.
I think back to a comment made about 1969 or so by a social conscience comedian on television: "You want young people to go to church? Put tanks in front of the churches and order people to stay away."
It is better that the schools NOT have an Ayn Rand Day.
There's another way to write?
1) Use of ellipses is overdone. One or two is usually sufficient. However, since you are a stream of consciousness writer, I can excuse the greater part of them since they convey your mental state but they do tend to confuse the reader. I will correct as I think it should read. However, I'll let you decide where you would place alternate punctuation, did you decide to so do.
2)etc is not an acceptable abbreviation. Either use the full 'et cetera' or abbreviate 'et c.'
3)I think you are meaning to say, "It led me to you...". Poor grammatical skills. Better proofreading should help there. Punctuation is missing. Comma after "YOU".
4)Line One: The phrase 'for sure' should be placed in commas as it is a parenthetical expression, needing to be separated from the main thought of the sentence.
5) Line 2: Comma between 'interview' and 'I'. Comma after 'thinking'. Also, comma after 'Okay' instead of ellipses. Question mark after 'lady'. Delete the conjunction 'and'. Begin a new sentence.
6) Line 3: Delete comma after 'search'. You may continue to use the conjunction 'but', however, it makes the sentence too 'run-on'. (As a course in My Master's program, I took technical writing. My instructor stressed keeping sentences from being too long or complicated.) If you choose to use my suggestion, place a comma between 'light' and 'so'. Switch the order of the first two words of the next sentence.
7) Line 4: Period after 'Netflix'. Begin new sentence. Comma after 'it'. Change second 'one' to 'on'. Delete ellipses after 'prophecy'. Period after second 'that'.
8) Line5: Begin new sentence. Comma after 'book'. 'Part' may, or may not be capitalized. However, general usage has it capitalized since it is a part of a title. Comma after the 'II', with commas in between the multiple et cetera.
9) Line 6: That's just you and no dissection necessary.
That's it. I hope you enjoy.
I guess few are getting tenure pushing Objectivism...
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